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Mr Invisible
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Get ready, almost time.....a few more seconds, wait half a second more, click, pop, brain is in slow motion, impact, targets head tilts to one side, red spray flashes from his head, thud body hits the floor, ok lets move, did he deserve that? Somebodys son, brother, father, husband gone for ever, how will his loved ones feel, wait a minute its not for me to decide, just have to follow my orders
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Sounds like he's describing someone just being shot in the head. to be honest matey, you need to use more gruesome description. Here, try this.
Get ready, almost time.....a few more seconds, wait half a second more, click, pop, brain is in slow motion, impact, targets head snaps to one side, a deep red spray flashes from his head, his lifeless body hits the floor. "Ok lets move. Did he deserve that? Somebodies son, brother, father, husband gone for ever. How will his loved ones feel? Wait a minute, it's not for me to decide, just have to follow my orders."
On another note, your English is atrocious and your use of grammar is awful. Interesting little story though... now please... go die.
Get ready, almost time.....a few more seconds, wait half a second more, click, pop, brain is in slow motion, impact, targets head snaps to one side, a deep red spray flashes from his head, his lifeless body hits the floor. "Ok lets move. Did he deserve that? Somebodies son, brother, father, husband gone for ever. How will his loved ones feel? Wait a minute, it's not for me to decide, just have to follow my orders."
On another note, your English is atrocious and your use of grammar is awful. Interesting little story though... now please... go die.
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Mr Invisible
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Re: random words....
Yes, it's tragic when a British soldier is killed in action, thank you for your support. But you should spare a thought for the other side too, we're all human after all.Mr Invisible wrote:Get ready, almost time.....a few more seconds, wait half a second more, click, pop, brain is in slow motion, impact, targets head tilts to one side, red spray flashes from his head, thud body hits the floor, ok lets move, did he deserve that? Somebodys son, brother, father, husband gone for ever, how will his loved ones feel, wait a minute its not for me to decide, just have to follow my orders
Also, hello Yochanan / Yochanan's mate.
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Illustrious
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Sarastro, that was the absolute first thing I thought upon reading it, but yoch--- what ever his name is would never call someone a muppet so ya never know.
On another note, what sort of reaction do you expect when your first post looks alike lot the start of an anti-war protest argument. Try introducing yourself if you're the real deal and you wont face such opposition.
On another note, what sort of reaction do you expect when your first post looks alike lot the start of an anti-war protest argument. Try introducing yourself if you're the real deal and you wont face such opposition.
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Why is it always a bloke that dies in these stories? There are women in the Armed Forces too you know, we've as much right to be killed in action as anyone else!

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